End of Chapter 1

April 20th, 2017, 2:30 pm
Did anyone find the continuity errors? I'm sure you probably found ones that even I wasn't aware of, actually...
Well, here are the ones I noticed after finishing the chapter:

1: The registration is at nine, but later, Roger mentions it being at ten. Or ending at ten, but starting at nine? Actually, this one's a grey area, but the important things is that I wasn't paying any attention to it.

2: When it comes to dealing with replacements, the bus driver received no training whatsoever...except for the protocol that prevents him from using it as a bus after it's paralyzed.

This chapter's continuity errors were accidental, and as I type this I realize the first one was a stretch...but it got me thinking...what if, in future chapters, I put them in on purpose, to see if people could find them? Would that be fun, or is it a dumb idea? Feel free to post your thoughts...or not post them. It's really up to you, otherwise I'm gonna keep doing this. If I make more chapters. Which I won't say definitively up here.
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Ultima527 April 17th, 2017, 3:27 pm
Alright, that's it for chapter 1!'s the deal. I got five pages into chapter 2...and then just stopped. It's not because I'm's because I'm quitting the comic.
This was meant to be experimental, and I was on the fence about it the whole time. Part of why I did this was to see if I enjoyed/could get better at drawing, and what I found was that even a primitive, ms paint comic like this is a lot of work. It was really tedious.
As for the comic itself, I have mixed feelings. It moves way too slowly (I mean, practically nothing happened in this chapter), and while it is fun to poke at mundane stuff, it helped me (by trail and error) realize I prefer to do things that are more epic and action packed. This comic was an attempt to combine high sci-fi, action adventure with mundane sitcoms (eventually), but I don't think it blended well.
There are things I like about it, and I've grown really attached to the characters (most of whom haven't appeared), but overall I don't want to put this much work into it. It was meant to be casual and it turned into a big distraction.

The truth is, comics were more of a hobby for me overall. I don't want to definitively say I'm retiring, because I have a few ideas for some simplistic, "joke" comics, far as bigger story arcs and presentable artwork go, I think I'm done. As much as I love visual storytelling, I'm just not good at it, so I think I need to focus on just writing for now.

So...this comic isn't really popular anyway, but if anyone secretly loves it for some reason, now's the time to say it. I'm not denying the possibility of coming back to this, but if I do I'll have to fix the pacing problem. According to the script I have, it take four chapters for the two main characters to become friends. In fact, I'm eight chapters in and we've hardly been introduced to some of the main characters. And it took, like, weeks just to do the bus chase seen. So...yeah. I apologize to anyone who wanted to see where this is going...but I'm afraid your in the minority, and I'm out of energy. Have a good one!
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locoroco1 April 22nd, 2017, 3:06 pm
You know what? Good on you for trying it out though.
Ultima527 April 22nd, 2017, 3:31 pm
Thanks! I really appreciate that. Thank you for reading!

Despite it's horrible art and small fan-base, I don't consider this comic to be a failure; it was more of a learning experience, and there were points where I genuinely enjoyed making it.
But yeah, everything that would have made the comic worthwhile would have taken tens of chapters to establish, which is why the first chapter is so awkward on it's own.
But again, thanks for reading anyway!
locoroco1 April 23rd, 2017, 5:48 pm
@Ultima527: I know how hard it is for creative types to actually do something, everyone is full of ideas and it's so much fun to start something but doing it can be a slog. Everyone wants their stuff to just spring forth from their minds fully formed like Athena. Keep on trying!